In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

With the increasing of many criminal activities in public area, Camera surveillance has been adopted as an effective way to reduce
crime rate
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the crime rate
in many places around the
world
. It has been argued that
although
these devices help fight back against unwanted crimes and increase the level of securities, some people still believe that their personal privacy have been violated. In my own point of view, the
advatanges
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
do outweigh the
disadvanatages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
disadvantage
for these below reasons. Personal freedom or privacy is considered to be one of the require rights for citizens of countries around the
world
. In some part of the
world
, Government agencies are
forbiden
excluded from use or mention
forbidden
from taking photos of each individual without permission. One of the problems that cameras bring to people is that there is no guarantee that personal data about our
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
and activities is kept away from
third
party agencies. The number of hack activities aiming at local
authorities
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authority
information storage facilities is increasing tremendously without any proper measurement to due
with
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to
. Our personal data might be sold to advertising agencies, hackers for the purpose of establishing marketing strategies or scam actions.
For example
, one of the facilities in China which responsible for keeping data from
survillance
close observation of a person or group (usually by the police)
surveillance
cameras was hacked by
annonymous
having no known name or identity or known source
anonymous
who
then
later sold
these information
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this information
to
third
party agencies.
On the other hand
, video recording devices play a crucial role in the
world
today as to
elimate
terminate, end, or take out
eliminate
alienate
any risks of being attacked by terrorism and tracking criminal who is hiding from the police. Paris and London are two
citites
the combined stakes of the betters
kitties
that were suffered
servely
to a severe or serious degree
severely
damages from recent terrorist actions. As a way to maintain security and order in public or tourist attractions, cameras have been established which prove to be extremely effective in fighting against
these crime
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these crimes
this crime
.
Other
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Another
benefit would be that video cameras can help
police department
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police departments
uncover many hiding criminals by using AI in video analysing.
This
benefit helped Chinese police to capture a criminal who has been hiding from authorities for almost 20 years. In conclusion,
although
our personal freedom might be violated due to the establishing of
videos
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video
recording devices,
this
method
help
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helps
us to stay safe from unwanted crimes or any actions by terrorists. In my personal view,
this
technology gadgets
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technology, gadgets
offer benefits that
are outweigh
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outweigh
have outweighed
its disadvantages respectively.
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