Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

There is a big amount of workers who have sitting jobs and who does not do any physical exercises at the off
work
time
and eventually they have diseases related to the lack of physical activity
such
as diabetes and obesity.
This
people
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person
have not get
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has not got
enough activity because of
high level
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the high level
high levels
of pressure at
work
and insufficient free
time
to devote it to the sport exercises. To solve
this
problem, employers should give extra benefits to their employees who wish to improve their health through fitness
such
as give them extra
time
off
work
. Many people have jobs which do not give them enough free
time
to get all their thoughts realized. Office workers are often having to
work
at the desk for
entire day
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the entire day
an entire day
after that they have to choose to spend their free
time
with family or in the gym. And
that is
the reason of people not doing enough sport activities is that they choose to be with their beloved any extra
time
they got.
For example
, standard shift in Russia is 9 hours and the way to the
work
and back could take another 2 hours, so there is not enough
time
for sport activities after
work
if one has family liabilities. To encourage employees to be in a good physical condition, employers could give them motivation like giving some extra
time
off
work
if they will attend gym at
this
time
. Providing about 2 extra hours of break each week could improve the
healthiness
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health
of the worker and he could
work
more efficiently and he will rarely be absent at
work
because of sickness and meeting doctor.
For example
, many companies who have own gyms at their buildings show that their employees became much healthier when gyms became to operate. In conclusion, there is a problem with lack of physical activity among office workers caused by insufficient free
time
and the way to solve it is to provide extra free
time
by employers for those of them who ready to spend
this
time
in the gyms.

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