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Some countries spend lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

#countries #money #bicycle #usage #traffic #congestion
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Nowadays, the world is suffering from
traffic
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 congestion. To eradicate
this
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 problem, many countries spent a huge amount of money for the easier
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usage
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use
 of
bicycle
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bicycles
the bicycle
. In my opinion, Yes, bicycle
usage
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 is the best solution. As it reduces
traffic
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 and accidents and
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, they are
environmental
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environmentally
 friendly. To embark upon,
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 accidents and
traffic
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 problems are the major issues of any countries in the world. Driving vehicles on a high speeds leads to
road
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 accidents. People drive at a high speed to reach quickly to their
destination but
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destination, but
 a small miss calculation on
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road results
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the road results
into
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in
 accidents. One clear example, In India approximately 8
road
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 accidents happen daily. The
usage
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 of vehicles is more and more due to which there is so much
traffic
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 on roads. Especially, during peak hours. The usages of bicycles for sure lower the rate of
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 problem and
also
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road
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 accidents. Bicycles do not need a space like other vehicle. One of the clearest
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examples
 is the space which two
vehicle
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vehicles
occupies
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occupy
 it can easily
replaced
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replace
 by the more than eight bicycles. Eight bicycles can ride at the same time on the
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 by replacing two vehicles.
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, speed limit of bicycles is very less as a
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result, there
result there
 would not be any
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 accidents. Bicycles do not release harmful smoke like other vehicles they are
environmental
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environmentally
 friendly. To conclude, I would like to reiterate that for a healthy life for a citizen. Government should spend a good amount for the comfortable
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usage
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use
 of bicycles as they reduce major
road
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 accidents and
traffic
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 jams and
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furthermore they
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furthermore, they
 are the best solution in term of keeping environment clear and healthy.

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