The % of overweight children in Weston countries has increased by 20% in last 10 years. Discuss the cause and effects of disturbing trend?

Now a days
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Nowadays
, children in foreign countries
has increased
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have increased
their weight 20% as compared to
last
10 years, it has many causes and effects that are discuses in the following a
paragraphs
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paragraph
.
To begin
with, obesity has many causes like junk foods, overeating and frequency of eating that increase the body fat. Mostly children are couch potatoes and prefer to eat spicy food rather than homemade food that are
unhygienic
,
it
it is
it's
effects on their physical fitness.
Moreover youth
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Moreover, youth
attracted towards the indoor activities like video game, internet surfing, chatting that make them lazy, fatigue and
weak
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weakness
. If they started outdoor activity
then
their body fat and calories will be
burn
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burned
burnt
due to body movement.
Moreover
, parents are
also
responsible for their children. If they guide and encouraged their son and daughter for outdoor activities and avoid fast food
become
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becoming
healthy life.
Furthermore
, one of the other main reasons is diseases like asthma, blood pressure, diabetes, thyroid, insulin. These problems give invitation to overweight. Patients who suffer these problems do not work and exercises properly so they have more chance to gain weight. Few disease
are
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is
heredity
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hereditary
, it
transfer
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transfers
one generation to
next
so they have few
chance
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chances
to control them because genetic problem defiantly
day
by
day
. In conclusion, I recapitulate my views that overweight problem increase
day
by
day
that have
dangerous effect
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dangerous effects
a dangerous effect
of
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on
our health. Teacher and parents teach the adults and kids about the effects of obesity. If government should provide the gym,
health fitness
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health, fitness
facilities to the students in school level
then
we will overcome it.
Submitted by naresh on

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