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Some people do not mind to spend their leisure time with their colleagues while some people prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Leisure
time
 is a basic requirement for every
people
Suggestion
person
 in the world. In our modern
day
 to
day
to
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of
 life, spending
leisure
time
 has become the main entertainment medium for people around the world.
However
, who should we spend our
leisure
 period with requires a discussion. We must acknowledge that we spend most of our
times
Suggestion
time
 at workplaces. People we engage in our
day
 to
day
 life is the people from those workplaces only. So, it will very much easier to make a friendship with the people at work. As all the earlier friends from schools or universities are scattered in different
geolocations
several things grouped together or considered as a whole
collections
, the only viable option is to spend
leisure
time
 with co-workers cum friend nowadays.
Nevertheless
, most of the
time
 co-worker's have their own agenda on how to behave.
This
 type of articulated
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is not healthy for any sort of relationship. In our
leisure
 period, we would like to free ourselves from all the boundaries provided in our workplaces. So, articulated
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 will not help us to enjoy.
In addition
, we spend most of the weekdays in workplaces. Sometimes we stay far away from families.
Also
, sometimes our work is so hectic that it becomes tough to maintain work and private life balance. So, in our
leisure
 period, we should spend more
time
 with our families rather than friends from workplaces. In conclusion,
although
 friendship is a mandatory requirement for the human being I think, friends from workplaces should be less preferred over the family members. Vacations should be dedicated to family members only.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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