Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Children are the backbone of every country.So, there are people who tend to believe that youngsters should be encouraged to initiate social work as it will
results
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result
in flourished society and
individualistic growth
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the individualistic growth
of youngsters themselves. I, too believe that
this
motivation has more benefits than its drawbacks.
To begin
with, social work
by
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with
of
children can be easily associated with personality development because during
this
drive, they tend to communicate with
variety
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a variety
of people, leads to polished verbal skills.
For example
, if they start convincing rural people to send their children in school they have to be
such
a convincing attitude along with developed verbal skills to deal with diverse kind of people there.
This
improved skill will help them lifelong in every arena. Apart from
this
, the true values of life like tolerance
,
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,
patience
,
Accept space
,
team spirit
,
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,
cooperation can be learnt.
Besides
that, young mind
serve
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serves
the country with full enthusiasm that gives them feeling of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
and self satisfaction.
This
worthiness for themselves brim them with self confidence and patriotic feeling.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
going and experiencing multiple culture and tradition make their
horizon so
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horizon, so
broad that add one more feather in their cap.
However
, It is truly said, no rose without thrones. Can the drawbacks of
this
initiation be ignored? Children go to school, participate
indifferent
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in different
curriculum activities, endure the pressure of peers, parents, and teachers and in
competitive world
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the competitive world
a competitive world
they should not be expected to serve society without their self benefits.
This
kind of pressure might bring resentment in their mind. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
believe, notion of
teenager
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teenagers
a teenager
doing unpaid work is indeed
good but
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good, but
proper monitoring and care should be given to avoid untoward consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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