some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
people
have contrasting views about whether we should encourage citizens live in rural areas (
instead
of cities) to tackle the
traffic
congestion and
transportation
problems or not.
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While
while
in a certain extent, I agree with that idea
Accept space
,
,
however
, there
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are
is
still some other problems need to be solved in
this
situation. There are no doubts about that moving people from cities to
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the countryside
countryside
or suburbs could address
the aggregation of things (pedestrians or vehicles) coming and going in a particular locality during a specified period of time
traffic
trafic
and
transportation
problems. Owing to the fact that people tend to live in cities to have
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the better life condition, including
the better life condition including
a better life condition including
better life condition including
brilliant job opportunities, great educational system and stunning welfare.
This
tendency leads to some problems is that
transportation
system in many cities can not be able to serve the huge number of people, too much vehicle on the small roads. To solve
this
problem, big companies region should be replaced from cities to
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the countryside
countryside
, and government's rural areas should provide more infrastructure to give sufficient life condition for people.
As a result
, people who remain in cities could have more space on streets and avoid
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sticking
stuck
on
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the roads
roads
in a long time. Despite the argument above, there are still several issues that
traffic
and
transportation
need to be tackled. One of the main reasons is that there are not only the number of people join
Accept comma addition
traffic, but
traffic but
also
existing problems with awareness of people, as we know in some cities people participate in
traffic
with very low behaviour. Many people just care about their demands,
therefore
, they break laws on the roads
such
as ignoring
traffic
lights.
Furthermore
, with
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the weak transportation system
weak
transportation
system
Accept space
,
,
the point here is not about the number of people on the road
that is
governments should improve the quality of
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the street
street
.
For example
, in my cities, Ha Noi, we have some old streets with terrible surfaces that could make some accidents to people. In conclusion, immigration of people from cities to suburbs is a great solution for
this
circumstance,
besides
, governments should convince people
the act of bringing two things into contact (especially for communication)
joining
gaining
joinning
traffic
in more discipline.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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