The percentage of overweight children in western countries has increased by 20% in last 20 years. Discuss the causes and effects of disturbing trend.

In recent times,
obesity
has risen dramatically among young
generations especially in
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generations, especially in
western countries. I will examine the main causes of
this
phenomenon and some adverse effects on teenagers in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are myriad reasons why the number of overweight children
are increasing
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is increasing
. The
first
and predominant reason is that over- consumption of fast
food
. If the majority of youngsters consume fried
food
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food, then
then
its lead to
obesity
because in
this
food
contains most calories.
Moreover
, children do not give time
to
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for
outdoor activities like football, badminton and tennis and they become couch potatoes due to smartphones as well as television so that they lead to
sedentary life-style
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a sedentary lifestyle
sedentary lifestyle
sedentary lifestyles
.
For example
, before a
decade teenagers
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decade, teenagers
decade teenager
decade teenager teenager
were playing outdoor activities that’s why they keep fit
to
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for
physical
health but
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health, but
nowadays with the help of
advancement
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advanced
technology they involve only indoor games.
Thus
, due to above factors young generation become obese.
On the other hand
,
obesity
has various adverse
affects
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effects
on juveniles.
Firstly
, overweight youngsters
are becoming
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is becoming
prey from other
peers so
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peers, so
that the negative impact on
children
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child
psychology with
this
they loss their self- esteem.
Secondly
, teenagers suffer from chronic- diseases
such
as diabetes and asthma.
For instance
, world
health
organisation has revealed that in America, in 2015, 40% children’s were
prey
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the prey
of
obese
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the obese
who continuously eating
unhygienic
food
.
Hence
,
obesity
has
negative impact
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a negative impact
on
youngsters
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youngsters'
health
. In conclusion, there are many reasons to increase the
obesity
and these causes adverse effects on children psychologically as well as physical
health
therefore
, to reduce the
obesity
it is required parents ought to join the yoga classes with their children.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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