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With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that nonacademic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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In the 21st century, nuclear power plays a very important role on earth in providing the efficient, cheap and clean
energy
.
On the other hand
, nuclear weapons are the major factor in maintaining the world peace. I strongly agree that the benefits of nuclear technology are far greater than the cons, if only safely used. The discovery of nuclear fission and fusion reactions in the 20th century changed the way the humans lived ever after. At the same time, subsequent invention nuclear weapons have been posing as a
greatest
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greater
great
 threat to the existence of humanity. As per the available data, there are 7 countries that perfected the capability to manufacture the nuclear weapons. The scare of use them in conflicts has been
haunting
the pursuit and killing or capture of wild animals regarded as a sport
hunting
 humans. There were some high-profile accidents in nuclear plants in the recent past, like in Chernobyl, Russia and Fukushima, Japan. These disasters are posing as a grave reminder
to
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of
 the humanity on the destructive power of nuclear potential.
However
, since the technology is rapidly evolving, harnessing its
energy
 is turning out to be safer than ever before. Earth is running out of natural resources, humans are extracting the fossil fuels in huge amounts like never before to power the people’s life.
This
 can’t continue forever, ultimately destruction of
earth
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the earth
 will lead to the extinction of humans. Nuclear science is one
such
 technology if safely used, it can help humans to preserve the earth
to
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for
 the
next
 generation by supplying clean, reliable and cheap
energy
 To conclude, I agree that advantages of nuclear development outnumber the disadvantages.
its
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Its
energy
 is like a double-edged sword, it can either be used for good or bad. Only by people’s collective effort, the benefits can be harnessed to the maximum extent.
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