The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status
The chart illustrates the number of
hours
spent per
week
on
leisure
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the leisure
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time
by
men
and
women
of various employment categories in 1998-99.
Overall
,
men
spent more
hours
on
leisure
activities than
women
did in the period given. Both genders were most available to free
time
in the unemployed and retired status
while
the least accessible to have a rest were employed
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,full
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full
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time
people.
Furthermore
, there were no data given for
men
in
employed
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the employed
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part
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part-time
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time
bracket and housewives respectively. In terms of
unemployed
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the unemployed
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and retired group,
men
spent about 85
hours
per
week
enjoying
leisure
time
as opposed to
women
at around 75
hours
. As for employed
full
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time
men
and
women
comparably on
leisure
hours
,
men
accounted for almost 50
hours
per
week
, which is 10
hours
more than
for
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women
.
Similarly
, employed
part
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part-time
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time
women
spent
less
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fewer
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hours
on
leisure
time
about 40 per
week
in
a
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comparison to almost 50
hours
of housewives.
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