The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status
The chart illustrates the number of
hours
spent per week
on leisure
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the leisure
time
by men
and women
of various employment categories in 1998-99.
Overall
, men
spent more hours
on leisure
activities than women
did in the period given. Both genders were most available to free time
in the unemployed and retired status while
the least accessible to have a rest were employed Add the comma(s)
,full
full
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full-time
time
people. Furthermore
, there were no data given for men
in employed
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the employed
part
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part-time
time
bracket and housewives respectively.
In terms of unemployed
and retired group, Add an article
the unemployed
an unemployed
men
spent about 85 hours
per week
enjoying leisure
time
as opposed to women
at around 75 hours
. As for employed full
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full-time
time
men
and women
comparably on leisure
hours
, men
accounted for almost 50 hours
per week
, which is 10 hours
more than for
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apply
women
.
Similarly
, employed part
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part-time
time
women
spent less
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fewer
hours
on leisure
time
about 40 per week
in a
comparison to almost 50 Remove the article
apply
hours
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