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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
 people are visiting places of extreme weather as part of
adventure tourism
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the adventure tour
adventure tour
. It is highly risky for one's
life
 as the living conditions of
such
 places are mostly unfavourable. But at the same time it has some advantages.
Such
 experiences boost a person's confidence as he or she learns a lot new survival tricks during the time spent in
such
 places. The main disadvantage of visiting remote places of adverse living condition is that
,
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,
such
 places may not have proper healthcare
,
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,
food or accommodation
oprions
the right to buy or sell property at an agreed price; the right is purchased and if it is not exercised by a stated date the money is forfeited
options
.The water availability may be rare or what is available could be contaminated. It is highly risky for one's
life
 to visit these places without proper preparation and expert advice.
Police force
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The police force
A police force
Police forces
 in
such
 places may not be functional and people can fall prey to criminal activities at times.A lot of abduction cases of tourists were reported from places like Nigeria and Uganda. Governments always warn citizens travelling to
such
 places.But a lot of people still show interest in visiting these places
as they
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as, they
 see some advantages in it.
Main advantage
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The main advantage
A main advantage
 of adventure tourism is that it enhances people's confidence to a major extent. They realize what they are really capable of while facing adverse situations or challenges. These experiences can be thrilling and provide them the adrenaline rush.
Life
 in
such
 places will be totally different from their day-to-day
life
 and they
also
 have the option to explore the unexploited landscape and wildlife in
such
 places.Studies
has shown
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have shown
 that people who have successfully completed their tour to these places were willing to travel to riskier places as the experiences make them bolder and broadens their outlook to
life
. Travelling to places of extreme weather is a personal choice. As long as people take all precautionary measures before heading out to
such
 places
,
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,
it can be a
life
 changing experience for many.
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  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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