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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

#year #crime #rate #increases #rise #activity
These days, the criminal activity
have sharply increased
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has sharply increased
 in most of the countries. Due to that, people are becoming scared to go out. In my opinion, I think that the rate have
rose
come into existence; take on form or shape
arisen
 because of the hard lifestyle and
some time
at some indefinite or unstated time
sometime
 it could be because the
limted
small in range or scope
limited
 education for these criminals.
However
,
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,
organise crimes
is
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are
 the most dangers and common type.
Moreover
, these organisations are very strong what
make
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makes
 it hard for the police to track them.
Furthermore
, there is many people are
intresting in joining to
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interesting in joining
interesting in joining to
 these organisations because of
the high
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the higher
 payment and other benefits as supporting their
famlies
a social unit living together
families
. Despite the fact that their lives are in danger those criminal cares more in their
luxary
something that is an indulgence rather than a necessity
luxury
 lifestyle than anything else.In these
type
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types
 of crime the government
have
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has
 to be strict and punish them more extremely to stop their abuse against the society
On the other hand
, the
individiual
a human being
individual
 crimes are increasing
too as
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too, as
thfites
the act of taking something from someone unlawfully
thefts
 by using
knives especially
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knives, especially
 among teenagers because of the low cost and the absence of parental control.
while
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While
 the parents are busy
,
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,
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 have to mange their
live
have a great affection or liking for
love
 which might
lede
take somebody somewhere
lead
 to an
aggressive
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Aggressive
 attitudes
toword
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to word
 the community. In
this
 case the father and mothers are responsible, they have to teach their child to respect
laws
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the laws
. In conclusion,
crimies rate
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the crime rate
crime rate
 will decrease if we start to take a strong action against every antisocial
behaver
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
, the government have to
garnt
let have
grant
 that any criminal will
nevre
not ever; at no time in the past or future
never
 comeback to the society until they make sure that he has
regrete
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regretted
regret
regrets
 what he have done before.
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