Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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These days, the criminal activity

have sharply increased

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has sharply increased

in most of the countries. Due to that, people are becoming scared to go out. In my opinion, I think that the rate have

rose

come into existence; take on form or shape

arisen

because of the hard lifestyle and

some time

at some indefinite or unstated time

sometime

it could be because the

limted

small in range or scope

limited

education for these criminals.

However

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organise crimes

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are

the most dangers and common type.

Moreover

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, these organisations are very strong what

make

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makes

it hard for the police to track them.

Furthermore

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, there is many people are

intresting in joining to

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interesting in joining

interesting in joining to

these organisations because of

the high

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the higher

payment and other benefits as supporting their

famlies

a social unit living together

families

. Despite the fact that their lives are in danger those criminal cares more in their

luxary

something that is an indulgence rather than a necessity

luxury

lifestyle than anything else.In these

type

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types

of crime the government

have

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has

to be strict and punish them more extremely to stop their abuse against the society

On the other hand

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, the

individiual

a human being

individual

crimes are increasing

too as

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too, as

thfites

the act of taking something from someone unlawfully

thefts

by using

knives especially

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knives, especially

among teenagers because of the low cost and the absence of parental control.

while

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While

the parents are busy

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childrens

a young person of either sex

children

have to mange their

live

have a great affection or liking for

love

which might

lede

take somebody somewhere

lead

to an

aggressive

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Aggressive

attitudes

toword

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to word

the community. In

this

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case the father and mothers are responsible, they have to teach their child to respect

laws

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the laws

. In conclusion,

crimies rate

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the crime rate

crime rate

will decrease if we start to take a strong action against every antisocial

behaver

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

behaviours

, the government have to

garnt

let have

grant

that any criminal will

nevre

not ever; at no time in the past or future

never

comeback to the society until they make sure that he has

regrete

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regretted

regret

regrets

what he have done before.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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256 words

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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

Fully explain your ideas

Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that art plays a crucial role in society, while others think it is a luxury. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?