Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

These days, the criminal activity
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has sharply increased
have sharply increased
in most of the countries. Due to that, people are becoming scared to go out. In my opinion, I think that the rate have
come into existence; take on form or shape
arisen
rose
because of the hard lifestyle and
at some indefinite or unstated time
sometime
some time
it could be because the
small in range or scope
limited
limted
education for these criminals.
However
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,
,
organise crimes
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are
is
the most dangers and common type.
Moreover
, these organisations are very strong what
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makes
make
it hard for the police to track them.
Furthermore
, there is many people are
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interesting in joining
interesting in joining to
intresting in joining to
these organisations because of
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the higher
the high
payment and other benefits as supporting their
a social unit living together
families
famlies
. Despite the fact that their lives are in danger those criminal cares more in their
something that is an indulgence rather than a necessity
luxury
luxary
lifestyle than anything else.In these
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types
type
of crime the government
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has
have
to be strict and punish them more extremely to stop their abuse against the society
On the other hand
, the
a human being
individual
individiual
crimes are increasing
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too, as
too as
the act of taking something from someone unlawfully
thefts
thfites
by using
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knives, especially
knives especially
among teenagers because of the low cost and the absence of parental control.
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While
while
the parents are busy
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,
,
a young person of either sex
children
childrens
have to mange their
have a great affection or liking for
love
live
which might
take somebody somewhere
lead
lede
to an
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Aggressive
aggressive
attitudes
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to word
toword
the community. In
this
case the father and mothers are responsible, they have to teach their child to respect
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the laws
laws
. In conclusion,
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the crime rate
crime rate
crimies rate
will decrease if we start to take a strong action against every antisocial
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
behaver
, the government have to
let have
grant
garnt
that any criminal will
not ever; at no time in the past or future
never
nevre
comeback to the society until they make sure that he has
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regretted
regret
regrets
regrete
what he have done before.

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