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Every yeay several language die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages n the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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People have contrasting views about whether the
world
 will be better if some
language
 disappear following timeline or not. In my opinion, even though some mother tongues could not useful in many circumstances;
However
, I tend to disagree with the view above, we should save our
language
 as much as possible. On one hand, there are several benefits when some local
language
vanish
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vanishes
 throughout the
world
. One of the main reasons is that as we know we are living in an open
world
 where people exchange goals and communicate with others in very long distances.
Therefore
, general languages are very essential. In other word, if
local
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the local language
language
are
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is
 useless, so citizen should abandon it to concentrate on learning and use common
language
 in a
smoothy
having a surface free from roughness or bumps or ridges or irregularities
smooth
 way.
For example
, English is the most popular
language
 in the
world
, people could use that to connect better with others, while some small groups people use their mother tongues without relevant linking without side, which do not have much value
with
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to
 the
world
.
On the other hand
, languages die out regularly might be significant losing of human nowadays. Generally speaking, our ancestor spent a lot of time on
create
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creating
language
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a language
 as today, that may be very disrespected with them if we neglect our
language
.
Furthermore
, the variety of
language
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languages
has been affected
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have been affected
 in a serious way when many people ignore their mother tongue, meanwhile
language
 is culture of many civilizations. In an
indirectly
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indirect
 way, a lot of group people lost their specific tradition. In conclusion, though some
language
 seem like useless;
However
, that could play a viral role in spirit concept of many people
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