Musicc has playd in every society and culture in the world today.some people think music only benefits to individual and socity .other however think that music can have a negative influence . Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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music

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Music

is a universal language

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which does the work of bridging the gaps between people and even nation.

Inspite

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In spite

of its

not of long duration; having just (or relatively recently) come into being or been made or acquired or discovered

new

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erous

merits a

caln

group of people related by blood or marriage

clan

chain

calm

of people still feels that

music

have

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has

negavite

characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features

negative

effects on society. The

advanteges

the quality of having a superior or more favorable position

advantage

music

in society are not unknown

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Music

does not only entertains the

listener but

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listener, but

it is

alos

in addition

also

believed to possess medicinal values.

that

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That

is the reason why a calm

music

is always preferred at meditation

centers

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centres

the

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The

feeling of patriotism is

also

clearly depicted by

music

preference of a country

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owning to

this

every country has a national song

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Moreover

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most elite p

[

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[

ersonalities

the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual

personalities

of the world are associated with

music

in some or other manner.To name a few is Mr Allah Rakha Rahman has brought a lot of name and fame to

india

either extremity of something that has length

end

with the quality

music

Thus

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music

gives an identity to an individual and its residing country

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The only negative effects which are occasionally related by people to

music

are usually associated with lyrics

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used in songs.

the

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The

people with

negative mindset

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a negative mindset

negative mindsets

regarding

music

believe that musicians of modern days

uses

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use

such

word which appear

offiensive

the action of attacking an enemy

offensive

or vulgar to them and they believe it to have

negative effect

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a negative effect

negative effects

on youths specially

also

another

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

antisocial

acitivity

any specific behavior

activity

which has

gain

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gained

popularity in

music industry

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the music industry

is piracy.

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the rat race of

ganing

obtain

gaining

gaming

popularity the

music

is generally being copied or pirated and

thus

the culture of theft has taken over the

music

industry

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in my

poinoin

a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty

opinion

music

has

moe

objective form of "I"

positive effects

then

negative

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the

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The

use of

music

is just synonymous to the

usage

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use

of a knife

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As it is

upto

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up to

the user of the

knife whether

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knife, whether

to use it for chopping vegetables or for

committiong

perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

committing

crimes.

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same way authentic or unauthentic use of

music

upto

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up to

an individual. To sum up

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music

will always keep retaining its pacifying qualities and continue

soothing

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to soothe

the souls of

generation

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a generation

the generation

generations

and will eventually be able to

completetly

to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent

completely

change

mindset

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the mindset

of negative thoughts

bering

so lacking in interest as to cause mental weariness

boring

bearing

bring

people

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the

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The

world will continue

binded

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to bind

bound

with the charismatic

languaue

a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols

language

music

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