Musicc has playd in every society and culture in the world today.some people think music only benefits to individual and socity .other however think that music can have a negative influence . Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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music
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Music
is a universal language
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,
which does the work of bridging the gaps between people and even nation.
Inspite
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In spite
of its
nu
not of long duration; having just (or relatively recently) come into being or been made or acquired or discovered
new
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,
erous
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merits a
caln
group of people related by blood or marriage
clan
chain
calm
of people still feels that
music
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have
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has
negavite
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
effects on society. The
advanteges
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
of
music
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in society are not unknown
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Music
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does not only entertains the
listener but
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listener, but
it is
alos
in addition
also
believed to possess medicinal values.
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that
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That
is the reason why a calm
music
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is always preferred at meditation
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
.
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The
feeling of patriotism is
also
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clearly depicted by
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preference of a country
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owning to
this
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every country has a national song
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ersonalities
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personalities
of the world are associated with
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in some or other manner.To name a few is Mr Allah Rakha Rahman has brought a lot of name and fame to
india
either extremity of something that has length
end
with the quality
music
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.
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,
music
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gives an identity to an individual and its residing country
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The only negative effects which are occasionally related by people to
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are usually associated with lyrics
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used in songs.
the
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The
people with
negative mindset
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a negative mindset
negative mindsets
regarding
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believe that musicians of modern days
uses
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use
such
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word which appear
offiensive
the action of attacking an enemy
offensive
or vulgar to them and they believe it to have
negative effect
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a negative effect
negative effects
on youths specially
also
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an
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
antisocial
acitivity
any specific behavior
activity
which has
gain
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gained
popularity in
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music industry
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the music industry
is piracy.
in
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In
the rat race of
ganing
obtain
gaining
gaming
popularity the
music
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is generally being copied or pirated and
thus
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the culture of theft has taken over the
music
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industry
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However
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,
in my
poinoin
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
music
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has
moe
objective form of "I"
me
more
no
positive effects
then
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negative
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the
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The
use of
music
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is just synonymous to the
usage
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use
of a knife
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.
As it is
upto
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up to
the user of the
knife whether
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knife, whether
to use it for chopping vegetables or for
committiong
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
crimes.
in
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In
same way authentic or unauthentic use of
music
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is
upto
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up to
an individual. To sum up
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,
music
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will always keep retaining its pacifying qualities and continue
soothing
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to soothe
the souls of
generation
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a generation
the generation
generations
and will eventually be able to
completetly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
change
mindset
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the mindset
of negative thoughts
bering
so lacking in interest as to cause mental weariness
boring
bearing
bring
people
.
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.
the
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The
world will continue
binded
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to bind
bound
with the charismatic
languaue
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
of
music
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.
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