In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In a lot of nations
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,
,
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the offspring
offspring
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is becoming
are becoming
obese and delicate
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.
.
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Some
some
people believe that the authorities should have the duties about
this
reality
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.
.
From my perspective
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,
,
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I
i
completely disagree with
this
statement
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.
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Personally, I believe that eating habit of children is one of the most common
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reasons
reason
of overweight and bad health of a child
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.
.
Nowadays
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,
,
the kids consume a large amount fast
food
and junk
food
for instance
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:
:
chips
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,
,
hamburger
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,
,
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etc.
etc
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,
,
and these types of
food
have big quantity of calories
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,
,
and these kinds of
food
will
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do
make
people get fat and some related diseases
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.
.
In addition
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,
,
at present the information technology industry is growing day by day
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,
,
as a
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result, children
result children
health is
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affected
effected
negatively because a lot of children are usually
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kept
keep
their eyes on their phone or computer and always sit in front of their electronic devices for a long time
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,
,
the consequences are
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:
:
they
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will get
will got
some typical eyes problems like
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:
:
short-sighted
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,
,
astigmatism
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,
,
Presbyopia
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.
.
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Some
some
mental problems
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:
:
autism
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,
,
Anxiety
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,
,
etc
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,
,
moreover
the grease that their digest system
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have been converted
have converted
to energy will be accumulated and turn
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into
in to
fat
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.
.
In fact
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,
,
adults have a big responsibility to manage their children's eating habit
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.
.
They should keep their eyes on what their children eat
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,
,
and educate them to know what they eat
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,
,
they should limit the amount of fast
food
that consumed by their kids
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.
.
Beside that they should create some outdoor activities for their offspring
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,
,
and spend their time with their children
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.
.
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In
in conclusi
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,
on
, the governments don't have any responsibility of overweight and unhealthy childr
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,
en
, the biggest responsibilit
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belongs
y is belon
gs to their paren
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,
ts
, and their parents should have solutions to tackle
thi
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phenomenon
s phenomen
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