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In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In a lot of nations
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offspring
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the offspring
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is becoming
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some
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Some
 people believe that the authorities should have the duties about
this
 reality
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 From my perspective
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 completely disagree with
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 Personally, I believe that eating habit of children is one of the most common
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reasons
 of overweight and bad health of a child
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 Nowadays
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 the kids consume a large amount fast
food
 and junk
food
for instance
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 chips
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 hamburger
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etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
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 and these types of
food
 have big quantity of calories
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 and these kinds of
food
 will
make
engage in
do
 people get fat and some related diseases
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In addition
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 at present the information technology industry is growing day by day
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as a
result children
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result, children
 health is
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 negatively because a lot of children are usually
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kept
 their eyes on their phone or computer and always sit in front of their electronic devices for a long time
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 the consequences are
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 they
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will get
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 short-sighted
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 astigmatism
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 Presbyopia
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 mental problems
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 autism
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 Anxiety
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etc
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moreover
 the grease that their digest system
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have been converted
 to energy will be accumulated and turn
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into
 fat
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 In fact
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 adults have a big responsibility to manage their children's eating habit
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 They should keep their eyes on what their children eat
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 and educate them to know what they eat
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 they should limit the amount of fast
food
 that consumed by their kids
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 Beside that they should create some outdoor activities for their offspring
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 and spend their time with their children
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 , the governments don't have any responsibility of overweight and unhealthy childr
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 , and their parents should have solutions to tackle
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