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Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

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Owning a
car
 is obviously more convenient when it comes to
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
, but I do believe that the bad sides caused by
this
, specifically in creating traffic jam and
air
-environmental damage, exceed the
beneficial
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benefits
benefit
 of using a
car
. On the one hand,
car
 can be considered as one of
main vehicle
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the main vehicle
 to transport everywhere, from the market to the office, especially the private cars. In comparison with the public transportation that available in my country, the private vehicle clearly is the best option for transportation due to its
good
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best
 condition of facilities and privacy, while the mass transportations often have the old and uncomfortable seated and the not really working
air
 conditioner, which somehow make the passengers feel nauseous during the trip.
Thus
, the own
car
 is pointed out the convenience,
also
 the flexibility of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 period and routes.
In contrast
, the growth of individual
car
 creates a heavy congestion.
This
 happens frequently in the metropolitan cities in my country,
such
 as Jakarta, Surabaya, Semarang, Pontianak and Bandung. And the traffic takes mostly in the morning, starting around 6.00a.
m
Suggestion
M
, and in the afternoon, about at 4.00 p.
m
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M
, the time when people go and come back from work.
This
 traffic jam might occur about more than 4 hours in a day, and during
this
 time, the fuel usage by cars certainly is increasing, which means the cars produce more fuel-waste, which usually is released into the
air
.
As a result
, the situation later leads into more
air
-pollutant that can harm the
air
 environment, which will have no good impact for
human being
Suggestion
human beings
a human being
, particularly in health issues, like lung disease and asthma. To reiterate, having a private
car
 is supporting a
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 with the flexibility, but
this
 action might cause an avoidable rush hour and produce the
air
 pollution.
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