Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduatesbhave led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history and only offer practical degree coursesbthat maximises chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The increased unemployment rate and the growing

tution

a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)

tuition

fees

has discouraged

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have discouraged

few people

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a few people

to notice the benefits of arts subjects and driving themselves to take up other degree courses with more opportunities.

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, the upsurge in the education cost and unemployment

bothers

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has bothered

me yet I

have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

totally against the notion as the passion for education vary

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from

person,

moreover

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, these courses are

major requirement

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a major requirement

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the society in current scenario.

Firstly

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, the students

develop

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develops

interest for the various subjects by the experience and would practically work on it. The expenditure to learn and the fear of less opportunities must not affect their aspirations. All the professions have relevance in its own sphere,

for instance

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, the

archeologist

an anthropologist who studies prehistoric people and their culture

archaeologist

which is one of the major realm I'd arts play crucial roles in understanding the hidden ancient mysteries.

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, the philosophy which follows in the list if the subjects is

high

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highly

valued these days as most people are stressed out and require motivation.

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, the job prospects in these fields pay

lucaratve

producing a sizeable profit

lucrative

wages though

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wages, though

the number of availabilities is less as compared to the other practical degree courses. The reason is that the human resources required and the work done in these fields is way less.

Hence

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, the hefty pay for these progressing courses is worthy. The joblessness could

ofcourse

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of course

curbed by providing the limited admissions in universities and development of the field by conducting research will rise the requirement of the personal. To conclude, the subjects of art group in the universities should thrive despite of excess cost as it will be paid back in

futire

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the future

future

and

their

in or at that place

there

is certainly

chance

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a chance

the chance

of progression in these realms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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