Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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When they finish

shool

an educational institution

school

, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a

job

or continue their education. While there are some benefits to getting a

job

straight after

school

refers to the speaker or writer

would argue that it is better to go to

college

university

. The option to start work straight after

school

is attractive for several reasons.

Firstly

, working straight after

school

can help us to earn

money

instead

of paying

money

for

university

college

For example

, students after

school

may be easy to find common jobs which can ensure their

lives

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lives, such

such

as working in factories, starting-up

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etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

Secondly

, working straight after

school

not only helps students to become

independent but

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independent, but

also

helps them to gain experience themselves. Because they can earn

money

themselves, they do not need to depend on their

parent

Suggestion

parents

.And working always studies more than theory so they can experience challenges to obtain the success.

Finally

, working straight after

school

can support them to settle down earlier because if studying in

university

college

, they will study

from

Suggestion

for

4 years to 5 years and they

can not

cannot

have their families.

In contrast

, in that time they may earn

money

, get married and have babies in order to

stablize

make stable and keep from fluctuating or put into an equilibrium

stabilize

stabilise

their lives

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On the other hand

, I believe that it is more beneficial for students to continue their studies.

Firstly

, it is undeniable that some jobs require academic qualifications,

therefore

qualifications play an important role in nowadays.

For example

, students will not apply the best positions unless they have high academic

qualications

an attribute that must be met or complied with and that fits a person for something

qualifications

. And they must only work less time

instead

of working many

hours but

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hours, but

maybe they still receive higher salaries

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Secondly

, the

job

market is very

competitive so

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competitive, so

higher diploma can dominate in society.

For example

, students after graduating

university

college

can be preferred than students get a

job

straight after high

school

when they apply a same position.

Finally

university

college

can help students to gain more knowledge in order to work easily.

For instance

, they can bring their knowledge to use in working and encounter less difficulties and challenges. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned about, it seems to me that students are more likely to be successful in their

lifes

a characteristic state or mode of living

lives

life

if they continue their studies beyond

school

level.

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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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