Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

When they finish
shool
an educational institution
school
, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a
job
or continue their education. While there are some benefits to getting a
job
straight after
school
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would argue that it is better to go to
college
or
university
. The option to start work straight after
school
is attractive for several reasons.
Firstly
, working straight after
school
can help us to earn
money
instead
of paying
money
for
university
or
college
.
For example
, students after
school
may be easy to find common jobs which can ensure their
lives
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lives, such
such
as working in factories, starting-up
,
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
.
Secondly
, working straight after
school
not only helps students to become
independent but
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independent, but
also
helps them to gain experience themselves. Because they can earn
money
themselves, they do not need to depend on their
parent
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parents
.And working always studies more than theory so they can experience challenges to obtain the success.
Finally
, working straight after
school
can support them to settle down earlier because if studying in
university
or
college
, they will study
from
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for
4 years to 5 years and they
can not
can not
cannot
have their families.
In contrast
, in that time they may earn
money
, get married and have babies in order to
stablize
make stable and keep from fluctuating or put into an equilibrium
stabilize
stabilise
their lives
.
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.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is more beneficial for students to continue their studies.
Firstly
, it is undeniable that some jobs require academic qualifications,
therefore
qualifications play an important role in nowadays.
For example
, students will not apply the best positions unless they have high academic
qualications
an attribute that must be met or complied with and that fits a person for something
qualifications
. And they must only work less time
instead
of working many
hours but
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hours, but
maybe they still receive higher salaries
.
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.
Secondly
, the
job
market is very
competitive so
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competitive, so
higher diploma can dominate in society.
For example
, students after graduating
university
or
college
can be preferred than students get a
job
straight after high
school
when they apply a same position.
Finally
,
university
or
college
can help students to gain more knowledge in order to work easily.
For instance
, they can bring their knowledge to use in working and encounter less difficulties and challenges. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned about, it seems to me that students are more likely to be successful in their
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
if they continue their studies beyond
school
level.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
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