Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

School plays an important role in the thought process of a person. Some people suppose that, non-profit services must be a mandate
programs
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program
in schools. In my opinion, I agree on
this
, growing up years
does plays
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does play
has played
an important role to do things naturally, Giving back to the
society
and helping others makes a sign of a responsible citizen. Giving back to the
society
needs a
warms
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warm
heart and it must come natural instinct. These natural instinct decisions
comes
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come
from the learning’s during school age. Those who learn helping others from their childhood or from schools,
then
this
society
will be a good place to live and for them it will be a sense of satisfaction. Many successful people
such
as actor Will Smith and footballer
Pele who
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Pele, who
all were poor or gone through poverty does many
charity
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charitable
works. Improving someone’s life is the greatest feeling on earth. During schooling only
this
though must be implanted in the student mind. These will enhance their horizon to help
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
and
also
feel responsible towards others. Serving others and helping younger one’s must me a compulsory
subjects
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subject
.
This
can bring a sense of responsibility in them. One clear example is, Army men are different breeds on
this
planet. They feel so responsible towards their nation and people. They
feeling
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feel
are feeling
are felt
implanted in them when they were in their military training. To
concluded
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conclude
, I believe helping others without expecting anything and responsible towards others, these though can be bought into a person’s mind by making a specific subject in the high school.
This
will make a big impact to build a better
society
.

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