Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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and helping others makes a sign of a responsible citizen. Giving back to the

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heart and it must come natural instinct. These natural instinct decisions

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from the learning’s during school age. Those who learn helping others from their childhood or from schools,

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can bring a sense of responsibility in them. One clear example is, Army men are different breeds on

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planet. They feel so responsible towards their nation and people. They

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implanted in them when they were in their military training. To

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, I believe helping others without expecting anything and responsible towards others, these though can be bought into a person’s mind by making a specific subject in the high school.

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