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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Cars are one of the oldest and easiest way people travel around in the world. As the population has increased, the number of cars on
road
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the road
 have
also
 seen a steep growth. I reckon that, the harm caused by the ever-increasing vehicles on the road would see a difference if people switch over to various methods of travelling, which could be enforced by international laws on car ownership. On the one hand, pollution caused by the vehicles has increased at an alarming rate. A plethora of people
prefer
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prefers
 to use their personal conveyance, even though, availability of public transport is available to them, which has resulted in egregious air quality levels.
However
, putting up laws on the ownership of the cars could help the governments of the countries who face these problems.
For instance
, the government of Delhi, India introduced an odd and even law which allowed cars registered by odd number be driven on odd days of the month and even registration numbers on even days.
On the other hand
, the public transports are not reliable and, in some cases, extremely costly. An average person has to pay a lot of money to travel around.
Moreover
, there can be some instance where the public transports have faced issues which can cost a daily worker. A car can be a very useful device
in these
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in, these
 cases and would
also
 allow a person to drive where ever they want, which would not be possible with public transport. In conclusion, cars have been used as the major means of transportation and it would only increase in the
future
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future, however
however
 if public transport and car ownership laws are put up appropriately, it would decrease the rate of multiplication of cars and help the environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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