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Some people sat that family is the most powerful influence in a child's development. Other's say that other factors such as (Television, friends, music, etc.) play a greater role today. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A
child
's development depends on many factors
such
 as family, friends, television and each factor has its own unique contribution towards the upbringing of a
child
. The moment a
child
 is born the
first
 contact is with his/her
parents whereas
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parents, whereas
 other factors comes into existence at a later stage.
Its
Suggestion
It
 is a proven fact that the brain develops 75% by the age of 5, and learns twice as fast as compared to an adult's brain.
Hence
, families impact a lot into
development
Suggestion
the development
 of a
child
's intellectual growth. By the age of 5 the
child
 learns almost all important
task
Suggestion
tasks
 needed him/her to face the world
such
 as walking,
talking recognizing
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talking, recognizing
 people, mannerism and all these characteristics are made possible by continuous efforts of parents.
On the other hand
, there are
whole lot
Suggestion
a whole lot
 of other factors
such
 as television, friends, music through which a
child
 discovers a whole different world of experience.
For instance
 TV helps a
child
's mind to explore its imagination through commercials or cartoons which may lead to enhance its artistic character. Whereas friendship creates a bond that teaches trust and reliability apart from family.
Last
 but not the least,
music
Suggestion
the music
 helps immensely as it is part of a
child
's life from a very early stage,
for example
 the lullaby's and nursery rhymes which are taught in nursery still stays intact in mind ever after 20-30 years. In a nutshell, factors may be many that influence a
child
's
development but
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development, but
 I strongly believe that family contributes the most. Not to forget, family is the
first
 friend for a
child
 and everything comes later.
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