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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

#parents #teachers #support #minutes
Parents are people
who’s
of which person?
whose
child
 sees after his birth and during his growing period he learns everything from them. The parents are
role model
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the role model
role models
 for their
child
. Their responsibility is not only taking care, feeding and nursing but teaching too. At the early age
child
 learn everything from their parents.
Parent
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The parent
teach
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teaches
 them
difference
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the difference
 between good and bad, right and
wrong what
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wrong, what
 to do and what to not do. So the role of parents in
childs
a young person of either sex
children
 growing is important. Unlike
teacher parents
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teacher, parents
 know their
childs
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child's
children
children's
child
 personality and they know how to teach them. Teachers
on the other hand
 teach generally whole class and
teacher
 uses general terms and parents use terms that their
child
 understand.
However
, even if parents teach
child
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children
the child
a child
 better than
teacher
 they can’t give the
child
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child's
 knowledge that he need. The
child
 taught by his parents start seeing
world
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the world
by
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from
 his
parents
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parents'
 point of view and will not have his own
opinion
. The
teacher
 may not be clear for student but they
not impose
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don't impose
aren't imposing
 their own point of view
on the
contrary they
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contrary, they
 give him general
opinion
 and give him choose on his own
thus
 he could have his own
opinion
. Parents
opinion
 about the world may not be appropriate because the world in which their
child
 live are a lot different. But they can give their
child
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child's
 basic knowledge. Even if they don’t understand social and technological changes they can teach the
child
 thing than never change. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
 must say that parent are important
teacher
 in our lives and even if they have
lack
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a lack
 of knowledge about some subject they still can show their
child
 right path and subject that they lack of
child
 can learn from
school
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a school teacher
teacher
 or other.
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