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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. You should write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

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The international sports
such
 as football, basketball, tennis, chess and so on brings people from all around the world to participate in
this
 event together regardless of their nation, culture and religion. The events
such
 as
World Cup
Suggestion
the World Cup
for example
 achieved friendly international relations that most of the diplomats and international organization like UNO
was have
Suggestion
was having
had
 difficulty to achieve. The international sports events really help to reduce tension between countries.
Also
such
 event helps increase patriotism within countries. The same interest among
participants regardless
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participants, regardless
 of their nation could grow up to
long term friendship
Suggestion
a long term friendship
.
Instead
 of competing in battlefields they compete in football field where people don’t die and countries become good friends rather than worst enemies.
However
, not all
such
 events go as
smooth
Suggestion
smoothly
 as
the
people in general
they
 should be.
It
Suggestion
It's
 hard for some people to accept defeat in sport
competition which
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competition, which
 brings to a conflict between the fans of winner and loser team. I saw
such
 incident on the news channel where two competing team’s fans started criticizing each other and
then
this
 escalated
to
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into
 a fight between them.
Nevertheless
,
such
 incident is rare and the police of the country where
tournament
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the tournament
 is held are
in
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on
 high alert and always solve
such
 conflicts before they escalate into something serious and dangerous. Even if
such
 incident happens most of the countries apologies for
behavior
Suggestion
the behaviour
behaviour
 of some of its fans.
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