The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

The number of cars
are grown
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has been grown
since the time of
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
appearance.
Nevertheless
,
people
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person's
peoples'
peoples
belief that new form of vehicles must be encouraged and current
car
ownership must be controlled by the international law. I believe that large amount of cars
in
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on
the roads causes more problem than
benefit
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a benefit
. Here is why:
Firstly
, the
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
on
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
. The
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
of cars on air has become one of the global
issue
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issues
.
For
example incountries
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example, in countries
example in countries
with large number of population
such
as China and India has
many amount
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a many amount
of
car
owners
too and
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too, and
we can see the
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
of cars on air of the crowded cities of these cities
such
as
Beigin
capital of the People's Republic of China in the Hebei province in northeastern China; 2nd largest Chinese city
Beijing
, Shanxay and
Kalkutta
one of the largest cities in India and one of the largest cities in the world; located in eastern India; suffers from poverty and overcrowding
Calcutta
.
Secondly
, the
car
accidents. In recent years the percentage of deaths from
car
accidents
has increased
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have increased
mostly in urban areas. To reduce
this problems
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this problem
these problems
some companies
introdused
cause to come to know personally
introduced
introduce
new generation
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a new generation
the new generation
of
cars
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car
car's
electrocars
the branch of physics that deals with the emission and effects of electrons and with the use of electronic devices
electronics
,
this
type of cars does not affect the air because it work on
electrisity
a physical phenomenon associated with stationary or moving electrons and protons
electricity
. But
this
cars
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car
did not become popular and common. I think
this
alternative
cars
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car
must be encouraged to commonly
use
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used
. Another way of reducing the problem is to control
car
ownership and usage by international law.
Such
law might decrease the percentage of deaths by
car
accident. In conclusion, the benefit of saving time by
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
on
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in
the
car
can cause more trouble than people may think. I saw many new alternative transport which could be more useful rather than current transportation and I believe that
this
alternative transportations must become more commonly used in the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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