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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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It is thought by some people that English, which is now the most widely spoken
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language
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languages
 in the
world
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, may
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 day predominate over all other languages and result in their eventual disappearance. Having
one
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language
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 would certainly aid understanding and economic
growth but
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growth, but
 there will
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 be some drawbacks.
One
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 evident benefit to having
one
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 global
language
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 is that it would enable greater understanding between countries.
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, if everyone spoke
one
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language
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, there would be complete understanding between not only countries but all people throughout the
world
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 which would promote learning, the flow of information and ideas. Another reason that
one
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language
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 would be advantageous is that it would help economic growth. With all people speaking the same
language
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, there will be less barriers and
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 trade would flourish between countries, resulting in a healthier
world
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 economy.
On the other hand
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, there are obvious disadvantages to having only
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 global
language
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.
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, it would mean that all other languages would eventually disappear and, along with them, their cultures. The diversity of cultures is
one
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 of the joys
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world
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 has to offer. Each culture is unique
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in
 its own way of life and own perspectives of the
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 which would all be lost if there were only
one
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language
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.  
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, it would result in the collapse of tourism because there would be no reason to travel for pleasure and interest if all countries had the same
language
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 and similar cultures.
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 would devastate many countries
economically
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economies
 that rely on tourism as a source of income. In conclusion, while there are plus points
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 having
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 global
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, too much would be lost
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. Maintaining local languages and cultures should be prioritised to ensure a rich
world
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 heritage for future generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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