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"Prevention is better than cure" Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measure. To what extent do you agree.

#prevention #cure #diseases #measure
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Nowadays, people have
forgotton
not noticed inadvertently
forgotten
 that "Health is wealth" and
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 they are more focussed on earning money. Long hours of work and unhealthy food habits have led to more diseases. Rather than trying to prevent the
disease
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, treatment has become more common.
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From
 my point of view prevention is always better than cure. Researching and treating a
disease
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 take
alot
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a lot
 of money and efforts. Even if there is a
medication
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 available for the
disease
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 still it takes time to heal.
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, the
medication
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 available will always have some side-effects to it. Either you will be feeling dizzy all day or will not be at your fullest energy levels. Excessive intake of some medicines can
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 impact your liver and your appetite.
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 of going through so much of trouble, it is always advised to prevent the diseases in advance by taking proper meals, exercising and improving sleep habits.
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, there are some times when you can't prevent a
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.
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, if there is a communicable
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, we can try as much as possible, but the chances of getting it becomes very high. In those cases all we can do is rely on
medication
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 and
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 wait for the body to get cured. There are many times when we are busy with our work, or family, or just daily routines that we don't get time for taking
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on
 our health, at those times only treating the
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 is the only way left. To conclude,
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 prevention is the best way one has, to lead a healthy life. But, due to the busy and fast moving life,
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sometimes we
 have to rely on
medication
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • incidence of diseases
  • quality of life
  • complications and suffering
  • cost-effective
  • ongoing expenses
  • public health education
  • awareness campaigns
  • government policies
  • vaccinations
  • screenings
  • healthy lifestyle promotion
  • healthcare costs
  • long term benefits
  • disease prevention
  • healthcare funding
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