Nowadays people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying themselves on other days that are important to them personally. Discuss and give your opinion.

In
this
modern life, people are giving more preference to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
day
celebrations
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celebration
than the national celebrations. As they are enjoying other days as it give more happiness and socialism. There are various reasons people
are disdain
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are disdained
their national celebration. In
this
essay I will explain more detail about the various causes behind it. Undeniably,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
day
celebrations
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celebration
like Valentine's
day
, Friendship
day
, Holy, Deepavali, Christmas etc., are celebrated imperative all over the world. The essence is they are sharing love, affection and gifts. Due to
financial crisis
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the financial crisis
,
government education
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government, education
policy makes younger generation losing their national spirit.
For example
, in Britain most of the youth
protest
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protests
due to increase of tuition fees, unemployment and education funding cuts.
Moreover
, due to increase in tax payment, higher competition in
job
Suggestion
the job
jobs
, which force people to concentrate on their ambition rather than on their
nation
. School children are forced to study for long hours to get good marks
instead
of knowing values, culture of their country. Due to international trade policy, some
countries
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country's
burden on their people.
For example
, In India, people are fury
on
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at
the government decision on hiking petrol and diesel prices steadily make people to focus on money
instead
of their
nation
.
In addition
, due to corruption of the government servants who make people are against the
nation
. It results in financial crisis force people to migrate to other richer countries to enrich lifestyle.
For example
, In India, due to poverty and unemployment, people are migrating to wealthy nations like
United States
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the United States
of America, United Kingdom, Australia, Canada, etc. In a nutshell, patriotism in all over the world fading gradually due to various reasons and forces them to celebrate on other days
instead
of their national
day
celebrations. Children should be taught national values, integrity, brotherhood and discipline. Government employees are
protector
Suggestion
the protector
protectors
of the
nation
they should be honest in their
work and
Accept comma addition
work, and
well being of their
nation
which will result in prosperity and integrity in their
nation
.
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