Nowadays people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying themselves on other days that are important to them personally. Discuss and give your opinion.

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modern life, people are giving more preference to

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

day

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celebrations

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celebration

than the national celebrations. As they are enjoying other days as it give more happiness and socialism. There are various reasons people

are disdain

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are disdained

their national celebration. In

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essay I will explain more detail about the various causes behind it. Undeniably,

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

day

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celebrations

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celebration

like Valentine's

day

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, Friendship

day

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, Holy, Deepavali, Christmas etc., are celebrated imperative all over the world. The essence is they are sharing love, affection and gifts. Due to

financial crisis

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the financial crisis

government education

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government, education

policy makes younger generation losing their national spirit.

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, in Britain most of the youth

protest

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protests

due to increase of tuition fees, unemployment and education funding cuts.

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, due to increase in tax payment, higher competition in

job

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the job

jobs

, which force people to concentrate on their ambition rather than on their

nation

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. School children are forced to study for long hours to get good marks

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of knowing values, culture of their country. Due to international trade policy, some

countries

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country's

burden on their people.

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, In India, people are fury

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the government decision on hiking petrol and diesel prices steadily make people to focus on money

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of their

nation

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, due to corruption of the government servants who make people are against the

nation

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. It results in financial crisis force people to migrate to other richer countries to enrich lifestyle.

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, In India, due to poverty and unemployment, people are migrating to wealthy nations like

United States

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the United States

of America, United Kingdom, Australia, Canada, etc. In a nutshell, patriotism in all over the world fading gradually due to various reasons and forces them to celebrate on other days

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of their national

day

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celebrations. Children should be taught national values, integrity, brotherhood and discipline. Government employees are

protector

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the protector

protectors

of the

nation

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they should be honest in their

work and

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work, and

well being of their

nation

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which will result in prosperity and integrity in their

nation

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Nowadays people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying themselves on other days that are important to them personally. Discuss and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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