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Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

#countries #environment #level
We are quite aware of the rising issues with
environment
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 as the problems
such
 as there is no
country
 in the world which is not facing problems
such
 as pollution or global warming.I partially agree with solving the problem at an international
level
 and the essay will
layout
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lay out
 the points for both. As environmental problems
is becoming
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are becoming
 a global concern
,
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,
it is a mandate that these issues must be dealt at an international
level
.The laws and rules
for
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of
 all the countries regarding the contribution towards
environment
 must be made and it must be checked that which
country
 is creating more pollution or waste and
accordingly
 the countries must be penalised.It must be made
compulsary
required by rule
compulsory
 for every
counry
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
county
 to organise sessions and events to make the common people aware of the havocs the environmental problems can create. It is vital that
the the
definite article
the
 environmental issues must be dealt at an international
level
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level, however
however
 we cannot neglect the fact that every
country
 must
also
 deal with the issue at its own
level
also
.As every
country
 has its own geographical conditions
,
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,
climate and with different type of industries
,
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,
each
country
tend
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tends
 to produce different types of waste so they must
also
 make rules to deal with the
inhouse
done within a business rather than contracted out
in-house
 issues on their own.It will be a vital step towards
acheiving
to gain with effort
achieving
 a healthy
environment
 for the world. With the drastic climatic changes that our
worls
everything that exists anywhere
world
 is
facing it
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facing, it
 is important that international laws are made to protect the
environment
,
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,
and along with that every
country
 must consider it as a major cause of concern and work towards the protection of
environment
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the environment
 so that our
next
 generations can get a healthy world to live in.
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