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Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's world, the society is increasingly modernized, leading to some changes in the way people
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. It is argued that it becomes a common phenomenon among people to have online business conferences, discussion or even training. From my perspective, the disadvantages of
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 trend are more significant for some reasons. It is undeniable that
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 trend creates some favourable conditions for people. The primary one would be the convenience when working online. What people could do is to access easily to the internet so having unpredictable situations
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 as traffic congestions might not occur, which means that special events are likely to embark on time.
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 helps the
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 not to be delayed and become more efficient.
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, by discussing through the internet, people can not only do many tasks
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 in a long distance.
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, while listening to online courses, students are able to summarize the contents into the diagram systems, which promotes their creativity and imagination rather than merely learning in traditional ways.
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, Amazon is a perfect example for working far away from the workplace. People are allowed to
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 at home where they can find the comfort and motivation
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 of being
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having definite and highly organized structure
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 by the nine-to-five
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,
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 claim is largely exaggerated. Sitting too much time in front of the screen probably cause eye-disordered disease or a sedentary lifestyle.
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, a long distance
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 might bring adversely drawbacks to the ordinary. It is obvious that there is
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a lack
 of direct interaction among people when working through a screen. When it comes to a project, it is necessary to exchange information within a team so as to not only find out flaws but
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 finish the
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 before the deadline.
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 testament shows that communicating face-to-face helps them to stay
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focused
 on their task and to hone their teamwork skill.
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, that people engage in online meetings would make them become passive. An online training course,
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, only shows them images while it is better to translate theory into practice, which helps them to improve their performance in their fields. In conclusion, working online has few benefits due to its
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convenience, however
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 do believe
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 trend has disadvantages outweigh advantages at the end.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual collaboration
  • teleconferencing
  • webinar
  • remote access
  • cost efficiency
  • cultural diversity
  • interactive platform
  • networking opportunity
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • cybersecurity
  • encryption
  • bandwidth
  • digital divide
  • screen fatigue
  • team cohesion
  • asynchronous communication
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