For Many people, the the reason they work hard is to earn more money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

They reason why we
work
hard may depend upon many factors
such
as gaining more knowledge through manual
work
, or as a personal interest in the
work
domain but the main intention I would say is ultimately to earn more
money
. In today's day and age
money
is the only thing that matters most because survival depends on it and to earn
money
one needs to
work
hard. It was not
this
kind of scenario say some 10 - 20 years back, people used to
work
hard even
then but
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then, but
just to earn enough
money
to support their families or have 3 meals a day. Working hard
is always been
Suggestion
has always been
a trait in humans, and because through
this
hard
work
we have reached at
this
level of technical advancement.
For instance
, in a recent discovery an image of
black hole
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a black hole
black holes
the black hole
was developed by an MIT student and it was a 6 month long process and it consumed almost 5
terabyte
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terabytes
of data. When interviewed, the student never stated that
money
or fame was the aim for
this
achievement rather her aim was to get the image itself and that gave her happiness. Nowadays, not everyone is enthusiastic about working hard for passion, rather
money
has become the main focus.
Materialistic
Suggestion
Materialism
is what we have become. Working day and night just to make
future secure but
Suggestion
the future secure, but
the future secure but
not living the present while some people forget friends and families in order to achieve the target
money
. Another reason is the living cost, since the economy is growing it has
also
increased the standard of living making it difficult for many people. To conclude, we humans always used to
work
hard but
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hard, but
money
was not always the reason. What comes
first
is health and
then
wealth.
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