Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trenda and fashions than what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Leisure
activites
any specific behavior
activities
hold a vital place in everyone's life. Generally, people choose these
activites
any specific behavior
activities
activists
on the basis
on
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of
their own taste and
preferences but
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preferences, but
nowadays, due to
drastic shift
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a drastic shift
drastic shifts
in lifestyles and updating systems, these
activites
any specific behavior
activities
have
also
changed according to ongoing trends. I completely agree that presently fun related
activites
any specific behavior
activities
are undertaken merely to show off status and attract people around. Admittedly, people in current society are more interested in those hobbies which are famous and are performed by their
celebrites
a widely known person
celebrities
.
This
makes them feel up-to-date with latest styles and trends.
For instance
, having gymnasium membership is considered to be a
most prefered
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more preferred
most preferred
things among young adults as they watch movie stars with attractive workout clothes doing exercise there. Another reason which incites people to take fashionable
activites
any specific behavior
activities
is the constant peer pressure. It has been seen in many people, especially children
,
Accept space
,
compel parents to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
them in some unusual area of activity just because their friends are doing the same.
For example
, my 15
years
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year
old cousin started taking belly dancing lessons to participate in
reality dance show
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the reality dance show
a reality dance show
, under the influence of one of her
classmate
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classmates
. In conclusion, due to advancements in technology, lifestyle habits of modern public have modified greatly.
As a result
, people choose those free time
activites
any specific behavior
activities
which are latest and are in demand and
this
make
then
more connected with others and appreciated in society.

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