some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making world smaller. others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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Whether or not internet has their

benefits but

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benefits, but

this

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topic becoming

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topic, becoming

increasingly controversial. It is

considerd

carefully weighed

considered

by some

thtat

pointing out something

that

being

hvaing

have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense

having

technological facilities is the key to decrease the far distance among family and

freinds

a person you know well and regard with affection and trust

friends

, while there are others who think that it is

creat

relatively large in size or number or extent; larger than others of its kind

great

create

a destruction on

tradintional way

Suggestion

the traditional way

traditional way

of meeting to individuals

becasue

for the reason that; on account of

because

they prefer to stay back at home. In my opinion, I believe that having internet connectivity is essential for those who live away from their hometown while It has

negative impact

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a negative impact

on local society. On the one hand, many think

thta

pointing out something

that

it is easier to make a

calls

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call

and massages to

thier

of them or themselves

their

own family while they working abroad.

In other words

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, It is possible to

develope

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

easy

comminication

the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information

communication

communications

with anyone who stay away from the each others. For an example, by introducing a mobile application

such

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as "WhatsApp" which could allow to make

vedio

the visible part of a television transmission

video

calls at any corner of the world.

Therfore

Suggestion

Therefore

, these people tend to hold their view that it connect the

diffrent

unlike in nature or quality or form or degree

different

nation

a vague idea in which some confidence is placed

notion

of group of people within

short time

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a short time

of period.

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in contrast

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of those people who argued that it create a

damageing

(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury

damaging

effect on

baisc way

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the basic way

basic way

bass way

bees way

to communicate with

eachothers

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each others

, they have reason to believe that because having everything is available on their computers by one click,

this

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person

doesn

mature female of mammals of which the male is called 'buck'

does

not want to come out from

appartments

a suite of rooms usually on one floor of an apartment house

apartment

. To

illustarte

clarify by giving an example of

illustrate

that, many

university

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universities

introduce

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online educational classes for those students who do not want to go and attend the face to face lectures in

institute

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the institute

Thus

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this

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view has justified that it led to harmful action on socialization meetings.

Finally

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, in my opinion, people should

balacne

a state of equilibrium

balance

thier

of them or themselves

their

perosnal

concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality

personal

life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

when it comes for internet activity. In some cases it is

really helpfull resource

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a really helpful resource

really helpful resource

to make instant fund transfer.

whereas by

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Whereas, by

Whereas by

hacking the website can cause

to threat of nationa

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threat to national

to threat of national

to threat to national

to threat to nationa

security. In conclusion, Data connectivity can establish a long

distanat

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distance

distant

relationship with

forigner

a person who comes from a foreign country; someone who does not owe allegiance to your country

foreigners

, and some

oppsing

characterized by active hostility

opposing

the view that could be dangerous to

collapes

break down, literally or metaphorically

collapse

our fundamental way of engaging individuals.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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343 words

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