some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making world smaller. others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

Whether or not internet has their
benefits but
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benefits, but
this
topic becoming
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topic, becoming
increasingly controversial. It is
considerd
carefully weighed
considered
by some
thtat
pointing out something
that
being
hvaing
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
having
technological facilities is the key to decrease the far distance among family and
freinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
, while there are others who think that it is
creat
relatively large in size or number or extent; larger than others of its kind
great
create
a destruction on
tradintional way
Suggestion
the traditional way
traditional way
of meeting to individuals
becasue
for the reason that; on account of
because
they prefer to stay back at home. In my opinion, I believe that having internet connectivity is essential for those who live away from their hometown while It has
negative impact
Suggestion
a negative impact
on local society. On the one hand, many think
thta
pointing out something
that
it is easier to make a
calls
Suggestion
call
and massages to
thier
of them or themselves
their
own family while they working abroad.
In other words
, It is possible to
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
easy
comminication
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
communications
with anyone who stay away from the each others. For an example, by introducing a mobile application
such
as "WhatsApp" which could allow to make
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
calls at any corner of the world.
Therfore
Suggestion
Therefore
, these people tend to hold their view that it connect the
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
nation
a vague idea in which some confidence is placed
notion
of group of people within
short time
Suggestion
a short time
of period.
On the other hand
,
in contrast
of those people who argued that it create a
damageing
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
damaging
effect on
baisc way
Suggestion
the basic way
basic way
bass way
bees way
to communicate with
eachothers
Suggestion
each others
, they have reason to believe that because having everything is available on their computers by one click,
this
person
doesn
mature female of mammals of which the male is called 'buck'
does
not want to come out from
appartments
a suite of rooms usually on one floor of an apartment house
apartment
. To
illustarte
clarify by giving an example of
illustrate
that, many
university
Suggestion
universities
introduce
a
Suggestion
an
online educational classes for those students who do not want to go and attend the face to face lectures in
institute
Suggestion
the institute
.
Thus
,
this
view has justified that it led to harmful action on socialization meetings.
Finally
, in my opinion, people should
balacne
a state of equilibrium
balance
thier
of them or themselves
their
perosnal
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
when it comes for internet activity. In some cases it is
really helpfull resource
Suggestion
a really helpful resource
really helpful resource
to make instant fund transfer.
whereas by
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Whereas, by
Whereas by
hacking the website can cause
to threat of nationa
Suggestion
threat to national
to threat of national
to threat to national
to threat to nationa
security. In conclusion, Data connectivity can establish a long
distanat
Suggestion
distance
distant
relationship with
forigner
a person who comes from a foreign country; someone who does not owe allegiance to your country
foreigners
, and some
oppsing
characterized by active hostility
opposing
the view that could be dangerous to
collapes
break down, literally or metaphorically
collapse
our fundamental way of engaging individuals.
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