Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while others feel like it should be purely optional. Discuss both these opposing views and give your opinion.

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Many hold the opinion that

physcial

involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit

physical

activity is an imperative subject in educational institutions, whereas, others think that children should be given the right to decide whether or not they want to

paritcipate

share in something

participate

in them.Both these views will be examined for the remainder of

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essay, followed by a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, the benefits of sports are uncountable.

Firstly

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, they pave the

way

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for school kids to move their bodies in a fun and motivating

way

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. Which is important because,

excercise

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

is one of the building blocks to total body wellness and health.

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, curriculum's should compromise of sports classes.

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way

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, they will complete their daily requirement of burning calories of 300 per day.

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this

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set up facilitates a

way

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for children to influence their families and siblings to lead healthier lives.

On the other hand

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, it is argued by many that sports should be optional.

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there are tangible benefits, not all

yougsters

a young person of either sex

youngsters

are interested in sports,

therefore

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they do not enjoy them.

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, many families take their kids to football, ballet and basketball lessons outside the school premises, for that reason they believe school should be academically orientated.

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, In conclusion,

althought

even though, in spite of the fact that

although

refers to the speaker or writer

believe in human rights and freedom of speech,

refers to the speaker or writer

also

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believe that

excercise

the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit

exercise

is an imperative subject in schools and should be

mandatatory

required by rule

mandatory

for children to participate in. In the future,

refers to the speaker or writer

hope institutions

worldwide provide

Suggestion

worldwide, provides

worldwide provides

worldwide has provided

physical activity classes.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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