Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

Almost all mobile phones now have social media applications. Through the recent years social media has become very popular among all age generations and like every
technilogy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
it has a good and a bad side though in my opinion I believe that
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
advantages outweigh
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
disadvantages. Social media has several
advantages including
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advantages, including
first
, it facilitates
communication
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communication, for
for
example it's
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example, it's
much easier now to communicate with
coallage
an associate that one works with
colleagues
college
and school friends than before when the only means to do so was through phone calls or mails.
Second
, sharing
information
and educational material
for
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any subject is easier
for example
, on Facebook there are several educational groups where several constructive
discusions
an extended communication (often interactive) dealing with some particular topic
discussions
discussion
and useful material can be found.
Moreover
, nowadays social media
also has
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also have
commercial uses, a
varienty
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
variety
of products are being displayed on pages
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on
social media where,
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on
most pages, you can read user's reviews, ask about the product and even file a complaint if the product doesn't fit the desired specifications.
However
, social media have some disadvantages as well, as sharing private
information
on social media can be risky if accessed and used by undesirable
individuales
a human being
individuals
.
For example
, several criminal cases took place due to using the personal
information
published by social media users during the past few years. Another downside to social media is the lack of authentication, as several inaccurate
information
published on social media without references or prove and
unfortunatlly
by bad luck
unfortunately
this
information
are used sometimes by users without checking them
first
. Another social media
disadavntage
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantage
is time waste,
people specialy
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people, especially
people especially
the young generation spend hours glued to their phone
instead
of using that time in socializing
,
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,
reading or working. In conclusion, social media is very
improtant
of great significance or value
important
in our lives due to
thier
of them or themselves
their
numerous advantages and for that the manufacturing companies are trying to
over come
win a victory over
overcome
the disadvantages by placing many
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a principle that limits the extent of something
restrictions
so that people can use social media safely and freely.
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