MPROVEMENTS IN HEALTH, EDUCATION AND TRADE ARE ESSENTIAL FOR THE DEVELOPMENT OF POORER NATIONS. HOWEVER,THE GOVERNMENTS OF RICHER NATIONS SHOULD TAKE MORE RESPONSIBILITY FOR HELPING THE POORER NATIONS IN SUCH AREAS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

Can poorer countries improve their economy with the help of richer countries? It has been said that in order for a poor nation to progress in their economy advances in health, trade and
education
are needed.In my opinion, rich countries can do a great deal of things to help poor nations.
To begin
with, there is no rich country that started being rich or that have become rich from one day to another, a lot of effort, honesty and the most important intelligent decisions are required so as to strengthen and enhance their economy.
In addition
, health ,
education
and trade are vitally important for
the the
definite article
the
economic progress because these three concepts are linked to each other and if one of these
standars
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standards
standard
is not good enough the other two will not work
properky
in the right manner
properly
.
For instance
, in poor countries where
education
is poor people get sick
bescause
for the reason that; on account of
because
they eat in an unhealthy way
as a result
of having not received a proper
education
and they do not have enough money to pay a private doctor due to the fact that most of them have a low wage.
Hence
, if
richier
possessing material wealth
richer
countries
hel
give help or assistance; be of service
help
the poorer
Suggestion
the poor
through donations of medical equipment, books or things that can be very useful for those poor countries, people in poorer nations will have a better quality of life.
Although
, the burden of
responsability
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
of poor countries lies in the hands of their presidents richer countries can do a great deal to help them
wihtout
in absence of
without
with-it
taking any political
advangate
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
for example
,
Venezuela which
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Venezuela, which
nowadays is a country that urgently needs help from other countries but
,
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,
no one wants to take action without receiving some benefit whether economical or through taking some petrol. To sump up, the world surely would be a better place to live in if richer countries helped poorer countries giving them useful equipment
such
as medical equipment, computers, books that they dismiss every year and their presidents of those countries started taking smart decisions.
Submitted by Serhio Baraniuk on

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