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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is becoming popular to control the children by some
short
a category of things distinguished by some common characteristic or quality
sort
 of punishment. Physical penalty is the best way to control children behaviour.
This
 essay will argue why smacking children is entirely necessary to teach them manners despite the parent’s emotion. Parents
have always been trying
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have always tried
 to establish a best practice to curbing their children. They are
justifiable
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justifiably
 worried about If their children obey the rules in school or somewhere else that could be led them on
wrong path
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the wrong path
 of
future
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the future
. Indeed, there have been some instances of children those
mother
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mothers
 and father does not show them
right way
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the right way
 or without any kind of punishing, which could potentially take them begin to be irresponsible person. These few examples bolstered existing fears in parents that penalizing
has becoming
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is becoming
has become
completely necessity
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a completely necessity
 to bring children on
correct form
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the correct form
 of discipline. Despite some parents getting more emotional while giving
penalty
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a penalty
penalties
 to their children,
instead
 of
this
, those parents who
are begin
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are beginning
are begun
 to be draconian against their
children
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children's
child's
 mistakes that could be beneficial to make them smarter and intelligent.
Such
 as by doing regular school assignments on timely eventually teach them time management manners.
Therefore
, acceptable hitting
to
being one more than one
two
 children merely
option
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an option
 to understand the importance of the self-behaviour. In conclusion,
this
 essay argued that people who are less develop the method of punishment for their children, ultimately unable to teach them
disciplinary
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discipline
 for their own life and future prospect.
in
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In
 my opinion, parents should apply a suitable punishment to their children to grow well despite their emotions.
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