Some people do not mind to spend their leisure time with their colleagues while some people prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Their
Suggestion
There
is no doubt that spending a quality leisure
time
is extremely important for rejuvenating from busy professional life. While some believe that one should not spend his spare
time
with his colleague, I would agree with those who argue that people develop
great bond
Suggestion
a great bond
while working
togather
Suggestion
to gather
, and if they are comfortable, they
should spent
Suggestion
should spend
free
time
togather
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
.
To begin
with, some jobs are highly demanding and consume
major chunk
Suggestion
a major chunk
of
daily schedule
Suggestion
the daily schedule
. People working in
such
jobs often face difficulty to strike balance between personal and professional life.
Therefore
, to escape from
office environment
Suggestion
an office environment
the office environment
, whatever spare
time
they get, they try to
spent
Suggestion
spend
with their family and relatives. In contrary, If these people spend after-hours with coworkers,
then
there are strong chances that, because of
same monotonous atmosphere
Suggestion
the same monotonous atmosphere
is continuing after
office
, they may not get relax and in some case feel depressed
also
.
However
, I believe that humans are emotional creatures. We develop relations with people whom we spend ample amount of
time
togather
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
.
For instance
, an average person
spend
Suggestion
spends
more than eight hours a day in
work field
Suggestion
the work field
. So, it is obvious that people make good friends over there. In fact, some of youth in
office
often get
Suggestion
often gets
married to their peers. The reason for
this
is that congenial people often get
better sense
Suggestion
a better sense
of understanding.
Morevover
in addition
Moreover
, if
peopel
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
spend good
time
out side
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
the
office
, their level of cooperation and trust will
definetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
raise
move upward
rise
, which gives seamless
office
functioning. In conclusion,
although
it is critical to get change from
office
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
and allotting more
time
for family, I feel that over a professional relation, we make friends for life at work place.
Thus
, there is nothing wrong to hanging out with them.

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