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It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Projections show that the percentage of senior citizens will be larger than that of young people in various parts of the world.
Although
this
 trend brings some positives, I believe that it is generally disadvantageous for families and countries. On the one hand, one advantage of ageing population might be a more experienced and skilled
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 force.
This
 benefits companies and organizations as people who have been working for a long time tend to make wiser decisions, which is less likely to cause losses. An evidence of
this
 is that a large number of people in senior positions are the elder people who have had more than 10 years of tenure. These people can
also
 train novice personnel, who are fresh graduates with minimal experience, until they can fully hold a position.
On the other hand
, the expected growth in life expectancy may lead to a lack of people in the working age, which in many countries is currently set at 60 to 65 years old.
As a result
, companies will have to seek employees overseas, and more people have to depend on their families for the means when they retire.
This
 places financial burdens on families when the younger generations have to pay for the elder ones’
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 and daily necessities.
Also
,
this
 trend may increase insurance premiums, which put taxpayers under strain, since the likelihood of contracting diseases increases as people age. In conclusion,
although
 ageing population provides a more experienced and adept
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 force, it means that less people will be capable of working and
thus
 puts younger generations under financial pressure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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