Sample 2: Internet crime is increasing rapidly as growing numbers of people purchase goods over the internet. What can be done to tackle this problem?

The rapid development of the technology has brought about

various merits

Suggestion

the various merits

to

community

Suggestion

the community

, especially the e-shopping industry. In synchronization with the advantages, the cybercrime, is the online fraudulent, is

the most worth

Suggestion

the worthier

-concerning drawback of

this

factor. From my own perspective, there are a lot of ways to solve it. When it comes to purchasing goods online, individuals play an important role in preventing themselves from the scammers. The plain truth is that they should do more scrutiny on the sellers who they make a deal with before paying money for the products. Thanks to

this

way, they could be able to not only choose the qualified

items but

Accept comma addition

items, but

also

avoid the deceptive e-sellers.

For example

, No sooner had they spent time on reading other customers’ review on Shopee, the giant commercial website in Vietnam,

than

subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)

then

they could distinguish the scammers from the reliable sellers.

Therefore

, they could receive the real products with the high

qualification

Suggestion

quality

after sending their private information or bank account. On top of that, the stricter legislation enacted by the website would alleviate

this

severity. To be more specific, the freedom and

easiness

Suggestion

ease

in registering to be an online seller

has aroused

Suggestion

have aroused

an opportunity for these fraudulent on the Internet. Facebook,

for instance

, where e-customers loss their money for deceptive or exaggerated items monthly has become the unreliable online market because everyone could join in the groups of sellers without having a business registration certificate. Henceforth, the cybercrime will not emerge if

this

practice takes place. As aforementioned explanations, these

such

efficacies, carried out by each individual and website controller, would limit or even halt the emergence of the cybercrime.