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Some people say that computer skills should be added to primary subjects in elementary school such as reading, writing and math. How far do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals say that the computer skills must taught as an important subject along with reading, writing and math. I completely agree with the statement that the younger
generation
 should be trained on computers right from the early age, people
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 are considered to be as illiterate if they don’t have basic computing skills. Interaction with the digital world is part of our everyday life and the people who
doesn’t know
Suggestion
don’t know
 how to handle the computing power are falling behind the digital revolution. Training the kids in the elementary school about the computers not only helps them in understanding the world better, but
also
 encourages and inspires them to be innovative. Most of the adults in the present
generation
didn’t had
Suggestion
didn’t have
 access to the computers until they reached later years of the life and it shouldn’t be the same for the new
generation
.
For example
, I didn’t had access to the desktop or a laptop till I reached early 20’s and it took considerable amount of time to understand and adapt the technologies, since the present
generation
 is exposed to the computing technologies from the early ages, they are far better in all the aspects. If the children get trained on computing right from the elementary schools and by the time they reach adulthood, they can be
exceptional
Suggestion
exceptionally
 good at it and can possibly lead the
next
 wave of
digital revolution
Suggestion
the digital revolution
.
However
, there is a possible
down side
a negative aspect of something that is generally positive
downside
 to
this
 trend, kid’s health might get
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 because of prolonged exposure to the electronic gadgets. If properly managed, all the risks can be mitigated. To conclude, I completely agree that the computers as a subject must be introduced
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the elementary school syllabus for the benefit of kids of the mankind.
Submitted by arjun.reddy on

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