t's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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While some people believe that if they have natural

talent

in fields

such

as art and sport, they would be successful, others contend that people should teach some children to become a good sports person or artists. I agree with the view that when children can be taught, they would be a good sport

athletes

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athlete

or artists. On the one hand, teaching any children people expect to have some unique skills which can provide

highly level

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a high level

high level

for best performance. Indeed, Quang Hai who is professional footballers in Vietnam national team was

teaching

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taught

professional coach

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a professional coach

professional coaches

, when he was a child.

As a result

, he has

fully

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full

knowledge and practical skills to play for

national team

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the national team

, thereby becoming a championship player in AFF

tournament which

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tournament, which

is a competition for all national soccer teams in Southeast Asia. That achievement won’t be possible, if he does not learn from his teacher.

On the other hand

, having natural

talent

mostly consider discipline rather than other persons because of arrogance. To illustrate, Adriano was a famous kicker in Inter

Milan which

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Milan, which

is one of the best football

club

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clubs

in Italy. He was

really

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a real talent

real talent

talent

, and had been successful career during ten years.

However

, he became

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arrogant player. With it, he was less practice his skills than before even bars or clubs was visited more

than training ground

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than a training ground

This

could lead to a decreasing performance in a match. Certainly, he did not play in professional club anymore. When looking at

this

example, it is clear that why people should be taught, particularly in the young age. In conclusion, any child should be taught by professional person to have more knowledge and practical skills, becoming a

best

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better

athletes

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athlete

or artists

although

they do not have natural

talent

Meanwhile if

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Meanwhile, if

a person who has natural

talent

do not keep their discipline, they could be

fail

Suggestion

failing

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

308 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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t's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

There is a lot of pressure on young people today to success academically.as a result some people believe that non academic subjects such as physical education and cookery should be removed from the school syllabus so that children concentrate on academic work

Children at secondary school are often taken on visits to museums, zoo and concerts and sometimes even to other countries. What do you think the advantages and disadvantages of such visits are?

Most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. Do you think this is the best way to do it, or are there better alternatives? What is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

Nowadays, children play less with others and this has an impart on their development. What are the reasons for this? Does it have a good or a bad effect on children?

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'on ebig traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is ? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?