t's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

While some people believe that if they have natural
talent
in fields
such
as art and sport, they would be successful, others contend that people should teach some children to become a good sports person or artists. I agree with the view that when children can be taught, they would be a good sport
athletes
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athlete
or artists. On the one hand, teaching any children people expect to have some unique skills which can provide
highly level
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a high level
high level
for best performance. Indeed, Quang Hai who is professional footballers in Vietnam national team was
teaching
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taught
by
professional coach
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a professional coach
professional coaches
, when he was a child.
As a result
, he has
fully
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full
knowledge and practical skills to play for
national team
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the national team
, thereby becoming a championship player in AFF
tournament which
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tournament, which
is a competition for all national soccer teams in Southeast Asia. That achievement won’t be possible, if he does not learn from his teacher.
On the other hand
, having natural
talent
mostly consider discipline rather than other persons because of arrogance. To illustrate, Adriano was a famous kicker in Inter
Milan which
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Milan, which
is one of the best football
club
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clubs
in Italy. He was
really
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a real talent
real talent
talent
, and had been successful career during ten years.
However
, he became
a
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an
arrogant player. With it, he was less practice his skills than before even bars or clubs was visited more
than training ground
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than a training ground
.
This
could lead to a decreasing performance in a match. Certainly, he did not play in professional club anymore. When looking at
this
example, it is clear that why people should be taught, particularly in the young age. In conclusion, any child should be taught by professional person to have more knowledge and practical skills, becoming a
best
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better
athletes
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athlete
or artists
although
they do not have natural
talent
.
Meanwhile if
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Meanwhile, if
a person who has natural
talent
do not keep their discipline, they could be
fail
Suggestion
failing
.
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