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Some people think governments should spend less money on arts and invest more in education. How far do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some individuals believe that the authorities should spend more money on
education
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 rather wasting it on the arts. I strongly disagree with the statement, spending has to be balanced on both
education
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 and
arts
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the arts
. In any country,
arts
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the arts
 play a crucial role in preserving its heritage and the culture, ignoring it is not the way forward. Over the thousands of years, each and every ancient civilization preserved their roots in the form arts, without which we will not be able to understand the depth and true history of the mankind. If the government is going to spend all its resources on
education
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, the system churns out the human machines with no sense of imagination and connection with the society. Admiration and promotion of the arts
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 equally important as promoting
education
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. In fact, I believe
arts
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art
 should be introduced as a subject in the academia right from the primary school. Arts define the identity of the society and it keeps the people united. India is one of the oldest and most diverse countries on earth, no other country on the planet has
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 an admiration towards arts
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 India and
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 evident in the architecture of the temples and its sacred texts. If the government
do not promote
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does not promote
 it, in the near future practically there would no paintings and the sculptures for the ordinary people to enjoy. To conclude, I firmly disagree with the statement that
government
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the government
 should ignore
arts
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the arts
 and spend more time and money in
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. It is a proven fact that
arts
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the arts
 can act as a stress buster.
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