In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

It is a common view that villagers seemed to be more friendly and
neighborly
exhibiting the qualities expected in a friendly neighbor
neighbourly
than their counterparts who lived in big, modern cities in the old days. While I recognize some potential drawbacks of country life, my belief is that there were more merits. In my opinion, there were a number of the great things about living in hamlets. People who
lived small
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lived in small
villages were very friendly and familiar with each other,
hence
no one felt lonely.
Besides they
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Besides, they
were willing to aid other do homework.
For example
, in my village
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
always helped the others to prepare someone’s big party.
Moreover
, the atmosphere in small villages is cleaner and fresher than in large cities, so the people were in a healthy lifestyle.
Next
, children in there could grow up in
natural way
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a natural way
. They did not play video games or watched TV a lot, they could play with many friends, and they enjoyed doing outdoor activities more than indoor activities.
However
, living in a small
villages
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village
also
had drawbacks.
Firstly
, children in a small village could not access to
the better
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better
the best
education. The schools were too far and there
was
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were
no public transports, so the children went to school very difficult.
Secondly
, people were hard to improve their knowledge because of the lack of new technologies.
Finally
, people did not get good
healthcare
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health care
, they were treated in the absence of medical equipments because the hospitals were located too far away the villages. In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of living in a small villages do outweigh the disadvantages.

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