With the pressure on todays young people to succeed academically, some people believe that academic subjects at school should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that removing non academic subjects at school syllabus can develop children to focus and excel academically. I completely agree that non-academic subjects should be eliminated so that kids can concentrate more academically.
First
, students can spend more time on academic subjects.
Second
, it can enhance more knowledge.
Alloting
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Allowing
more time on academic lessons can give students higher marks. They can spare more time on studying subjects more rather than spending it
in
Suggestion
on
non-academic one. If kids can focus on that aspect, it is more likely they will
suceed
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeed
academically.
Recent survey
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A recent survey
shows that kids focusing more on major subjects is said to be more successful in
profession
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the profession
as they are more exposed in their field. In case of removing non-major subjects in the curriculum, it is understood that
University
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the University
will impart more knowledge to students as
replacement
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a replacement
of it. It is beneficial
since
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for
students will be now more exposed in actual studies and learn more
theoritically
in theory; according to the assumed facts
theoretically
vertically
. The school will add more activities in related to academic subjects which was not included in students school guidelines as it is loaded. To exemplify, students who learned online focuses more on academic subjects and can choose as well as focus only to the course they wanted to. In conclusion, students who wish to
suceed
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeed
academically can eliminate non-academic subjects
at
Suggestion
in
the syllabus as it is not essential as a part of learning. It
maybe
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may be
a distraction
since
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for
kids need to focus and know enough ideas to become a successful one.
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