A lot of people who wanted to become professional athletes gave up this idea because of the fear of failure and parents' pressure. Do you think that parents should support their children who want to do a career in sports?

It is a controversial issue whether people who choose work for one of sports jobs should be supported by their parents or not. In my own perspective, I strongly agree with
this
view. There are two primary reasons indicating my idea
is
Suggestion
was
right. The
first
justification is that people who
decide
Suggestion
will decide
to choose their own career related to sports in the future need to have a strong attachment to that profession. In order that they can maintain their passion for their works, they
also
require support from their family.
For example
, Messi has a huge success in sports thanks to supporting coming from his family.
As a result
, a positive or even negative parental influence still has a significant impact on their offsprings' career choices both starting and upholding.
Furthermore
, it is undeniable that the problems related to your physical and mental in your job influence lots of on their final achievement. If adolescents want to study in fields corresponding sports, they will need to receive their family's members' respect for their own job, which is a help for their mental.
For instance
, after suffering injuries on the body,
besides
athletes have to treatment methods
,
Accept space
,
they
also
need encouraging by their parents or their close members in their family.
Therefore
, it is too difficult for whom do not have any supporter in their career to get the highest level. In conclusion,
this
is my own opinion, supporting coming from the
family's
Suggestion
family
members is very important to each person’s success.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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