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Universities should enrol equal numbers of male and female students in all subjects.Do you agree or disagree?

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University education play vital role in everyone's career.Nowadays, the majority of students are going to
universityafter
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university after
 they completed school
,
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,
the number of students are studying in the universities that are not equal. I agree
this
 point of views for several reasons.
First
, it is not practical to admit
equal number
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an equal number
 of male and female students, some of the subjects that are
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
prepared
 for male are different from those for female,
for example
, the nursing
proffesion
the body of people in a learned occupation
profession
 is
choosen
one who is the object of choice; who is given preference
chosen
 by female and who are
study
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studying
nursind
the work of caring for the sick or injured or infirm
nursing
 degree would be significantly higher than male.In
adition
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
 to, the various males are higher in engineering courses in
comperision
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
 of females, if academies are force for
creteria
greater in size or importance or degree
greater
 of admitting equal in these courses it is
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 foe society and nation, the economic growth will increase. The
second
 reason equal study of both
gender
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genders
,
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,
 society will be balanced by the contribution of these owing if both are studied in
same subject
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the same subject
 or
class room
a room in a school where lessons take place
classroom
 they will learn moral values and ethics.
Moreover in
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Moreover, with
Moreover with
 the help of co-
educationthere
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education there
 will be
improve
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improved
 understanding and learning skills,
for example
,
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,
 in the
hospitals both
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hospitals, both
 the male and female doctor's or staff nurses are
work
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working
togather
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
 and they safe the human's life, if they are not co- educate how they treat the patient's. In
cinclusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
consolation
, the university education is important for the men and women
,
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,
 the selection of student's would be based on genders it is good for our nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • stereotypes
  • workforce
  • discrimination
  • gender biases
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • humanities
  • underrepresentation
  • meritocracy
  • quotas
  • academic standards
  • qualifications
  • personal interest
  • enforced gender parity
  • dropout rates
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