IIt is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

How much freedom a child should have and what sort of measures should be taken to teach them the difference between the good things from the bad ones, is a matter of great debate. There are many who
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that children should be taught the moral values at an early age, and punishment can help them learn it. I agree with
this
idea but
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idea, but
physically
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physical
punishemnt
the act of punishing
punishment
shousl
be avoided.
To begin
with, If the youngster
are given
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is given
gives
freedome and
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the freedom, and
the freedom and
freedom and
freedoms and
if the necessary steps are not taken to control them, they will turn into astray. As a
grwing
(biology) the process of an individual organism growing organically; a purely biological unfolding of events involved in an organism changing gradually from a simple to a more complex level
growing
mind has
highest
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the highest
higher
capacity to learn new things, it is the prime time to make them
exemplary member
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an exemplary member
of the future society.
For instance
, in Japan, in the schools and at the home a great emphasis is given
on
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to
educating good moral values to pupils
that is
why Japanese students are encouraged to do do good deeds
for example
they clean their own classrooms, respect elders,
This
has resulted and well mannered society.
Secondly
, physical punishment can have detrimental effects, it creates a sense of
rebell
refusal to accept some authority or code or convention
rebellion
in children and deter their learning process. There are other
better ways of
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better ways
punishing
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Punishing
, like, giving them some extra work at school or home and keeping a reward for
achivement
the action of accomplishing something
achievement
,
this
will positively channel their energy
to
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into
something more productive.
For example
, British Children Psychologist published a research that, reward based tasks encourage new ideas building and timely
accomplishemnt
the action of accomplishing something
accomplishment
.
Hence
,
schols
an educational institution
schools
school
or parents in
UK
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the UK
are adopting
this
strategy widely. To sum up, at young age brain growth is
fatest
most quickly
fastest
farthest
so, we
shoul
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
shall
take advantage of it and educate children right and
wrongs even
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wrongs, even
we have to use some sort of
punishement
the act of punishing
punishment
as a tool to accomplish it.
This
will produce a
helathy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
, positive society which is fundamental of any
nations
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nation's
progress.
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