Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subject like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Based on the development of the modern life nowadays, student have many opportunities to expose to the diversity of subjects
such
as science, technology and so on.
However
, others argue that
history
is the most essential subject in the school while I believe that
this
opinion should be altered in
this
circumstance. On the one hand, there is no doubt that the aim of
history
is really important because it represent for the cultural identity of any country in the world.
First
of all, if the education
do not require
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does not require
their students to comprehend the
history
, they might forget their
origin
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origins
. According to the analysis of many
scientist
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scientists
, children are still good at many subjects except
history but
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history, but
they will not appreciate the results of older generations, they have to suffer the pain from wars in order to let children live in peace.
Secondly
, enhancing their knowledge about
history
can be an interesting experience which support them a lot in their future.
For instance
, when
student
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a student
the student
go
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goes
to study
abroad they
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abroad, they
ought to promote their culture for friends over the world by the outstanding historical characteristics of their countries.
On the other hand
,
history
is no longer suitable to the development of the education in recent years, some
history
are
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is
out of date.
For example
, there are a lot of old festivals which are mentioned in the
history
books but
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books, but
it is too dangerous and affect children’s thinking
such
as sacrificing
god
benefit
good
with blood in Greece.
In addition
,
student
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the student
a student
students
are enable
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is enabled
is enabling
to explore the subject which is essential for their life
then
it motivate them to study.
For instance
, children are fond of many
subject
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subjects
due to their passions which lead them to their jobs in the
future
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future, such
such
as math is suitable with who want to become business man or
teacher
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a teacher
and so on. In conclusion,
history
is really necessary due to
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
important
role but
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role, but
I completely agree that there are many other subjects which are more practical and bring benefits to children in their life.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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