Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give opinion.

Today’s advancement is one of the main
factor
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factors
in our society. Many
individuals
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individual's
individual
mentality has been changed due to lots of modern developments. Many mankind
accept
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accepts
it in a positive manner that it
have
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has
made them more communicating while others not find it beneficial. I would like to share
viewpoint
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a viewpoint
viewpoints
the viewpoint
on both thoughts and
also
suggest opinion. All human beings are different from each other, their priorities and personal lives are always separate. Some of them like to socialize,
on the other
hand few
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hand, few
of them prefer to remain
isolate
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isolated
. By the social media, it helps people to stay connected with their relatives and friends. They can do video chats
that
is
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are
very cheap and very convenient, if there is
internet connection
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an internet connection
.
Moreover
the social media like,
face book
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Facebook
facebook
, link den and others through which job seekers
also
get opportunities by updating their profiles.
For example
, I used to update my profile on link den, and because of
this
I got lots of calls from different organizations and recruiters. So it is one of the easiest
way
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ways
for someone to introduce oneself. Those who are not in
favor
promote over another
favour
of
this
is due to their narrow
mindedness
or possessiveness. In our daily
lives we
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lives, we
can see that everybody
have
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has
a mobile phone and people like to get involved in it deeply.
For example
, children like to download games, adults are used to working on it or using other applications. So it seems like they
does not have
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do not have
time for those who are near to them.
Other
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Another
example, parents usually don’t like to see if
there
of them or themselves
their
kids are using mobile phones or laptops in front of them because they think that children are not giving importance to them. In my opinion, social media have both pros and
cons but
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cons, but
advantages
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the advantages
are more as compare to disadvantages. Peoples are no doubt correct according to their
views but
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views, but
one can become more
explorative
by getting involved in new technologies.

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