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Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss both advantages and disadvantage of advertising. Include reasons and any revelant examples to support your answer.

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Today we can see advertising everywhere, from TV, newspaper to the Internet. According to Academic Encounters - Life in Society, in most daily newspaper, advertising makes up the majority of the content. Very large amounts of money are spent on advertising. A television commercial can easily cost many thousands of advertising industry. It
can not
can not
cannot
 be denied that advertising has a great number of advantages.
Firstly
, all companies must make people know their brands by means of
medi
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 when selling products.
Secondly
, advertisements suggest people what they demand to lead a more convenient life and where to purchase products with best quality.
Consequently
, customers find themselves
have
Suggestion
having
 more choices on the outlet.
Finally
, advertising is a creative industry that employs a wide range of people and most jobs related to advertising are now considered well-paid ones. The advertisement,
on the other hand
, shows many drawbacks. One of them is that they persuade people to buy a product without telling them the disadvantages of it.
This
 has led to the overstatement and even false information
of
Suggestion
about
on
 an item's use that we see in advertising industry nowadays.
Furthermore
, advertising
also
 encourages people to follow the latest trend and causes them to shop lavishly.
In addition
, many commercials aim at
chilldren's
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child's
children
children's
interest
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interest, thus
thus
 they probably put pressure on their parents to buy the items advertised. In conclusion, advertising is a form of modern business that every company needs in order to inform people about their products.
However
, it may be disadvantageous when it stimulates or even deceives people to buy them things a great deal.
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